First Look Friday!

It’s First Friday again!  Below is the first look submitted by Berrie Torgan-Randall. Thank you, Berrie, for participating in First Fridays!

This is designed to be an interactive post – your participation is what will make this valuable to all of us.  Please look at today’s submission and offer your constructive commentary by replying to this post.  Replies will need to be approved before they will appear.  If you would like to submit a “first” for a future First Friday, please email it to easternpascbwi@yahoo.com.

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4 Responses to First Look Friday!

  1. Zoe says:

    Hi! I really like the color palette in this illustration. I wonder how it would look with a little more open, quiet space somewhere in the composition? Maybe in the sky, or in the brick wall (which I like the pattern of, but perhaps it could be more subdued so as to recede behind the wonderful characters). To my eye, the elements are all pretty evenly spaced, and since there is a lot of action happening… I thought breaking up the space so that there were some less “busy” areas might enhance the sense of movement and rhythm.

    This isn’t a comment on the illustration, but I’d love to see the image a little bigger on the screen too.

  2. Hello:
    I enjoyed the bright colors of the red bricks behind the bright blues of the outfits. And the triple Humptys falling for butterflies captured my attention. Nice job!
    Wilma Fleming

  3. Berrie Torgan-Randall says:

    Thanks Zoe and Wilma for your comments I will attach them to my illustration and work on your critiques in photoshop!

  4. Hi,

    This is an interesting twist on Humpty. I like that the King’s men are helpful.

    It isn’t clear to me from this presentation, however if the intent is 3 eggs being helped by 4 men, or if it is a triptych of events. If it is the latter, then maybe a more horizontal design with obvious frame divisions?

    I like the color variation from light to dark in the brickwork. It looks like you had fun painting that part. Where is the light source? Even in a simplified color scheme such as this, light source should be consistent. Look at the figures, vs. the shadow on the brick, and the flags and butterflies.

    The clouds seem to compete with the characters to me, in weight and size. I would consider eliminating them or lightening them significantly. The butterflies are the obvious reason that Humpty is on the wall, but the dark blue in the wings and bodies is in visual competition with the main action. Perhaps if they are more monochromatic?

    Great job on creating a twist on this nursery rhyme. The overall palette is very inviting. I hope this was helpful.

    Best wishes!

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