It’s Friday again! Hooray! To celebrate, here’s a hilarious First Friday submission from Erik Ammon called Steve, the Giraffe With No Neck!
Quick Summary: Steve the giraffe has no neck. His parents decide it’s time to take him to the doctor to see what can be done. When they find out he can have a two foot long neck added, they are ecstatic! But, Steve’s worried about the pain and how he’ll learn to use it.
Picture book manuscript, ages 4-7
What question do I have? I don’t really have one 🙂 Sorry! Guess I’m looking for opinions on the overall story (well, the beginning anyway 🙂 )
Steve, the Giraffe With No Neck by Erik Ammon
This is Steve. Steve is a giraffe.
A giraffe with no neck.
Most of the time, Steve didn’t care about not having a neck.
“You can’t wear ties or scarves,” said a friend.
“But I’ll never get bit by a vampire!” Steve replied.
“You can’t always find us when we’re in tall grass,” said another friend.
“I know, but I’ll never need a chiropractor!” Steve answered.
Sometimes not having a neck bothered Steve.
“You just haven’t had your neck spurt,” said his mother.
His parents worried about Steve.
“He needs to turn his whole body to talk to other people,” his mother said.
“He can’t watch for predators,” said his father.
“You mean I’m not safe because I don’t have a neck?” asked Steve.
“Let’s take you to see a doctor,” Mom said.
“He needs a neck to keep safe,” said his mother.
“We can insert some vertebrae,” said the doctor.
“What’s a ‘vertabert’?” Steve asked.
“Vertebrae- they’re the bones in our necks and backs that help us move and turn our heads,” the doctor explained.
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