#LoveMadeVisible: The Inevitable, by Lindsay Bandy + Giveaway!

The following is an excerpt from my YA Magical Realism novel, THE INEVITABLE, which features three narrators, including one in verse. The story is about a girl cursed to die young three times, a boy cursed with foreknowledge of and the inability to prevent her deaths, and the Three Sisters of Fate whose very existence depends on their lives and deaths going to plan….

Once Upon A Time…
Electricity buzzed through Three great parks:
And Dreamland.

Crowded side-by-side on Coney Island, they were jealous sisters,
competing for attention, always trying to outdo one another.
Each of them was grand in her own way:
Luna had coasters, and sugary pops of cheerful color.
Luna had stars and a moon.
Steeplechase had a pier for dancing on top and kissing below.
Steeplechase had horses for racing and fortunes for the taking.
But Dreamland was white and black.
Dreamland was made of angels and demons.
Dreamland was lovely and dangerous and doomed.

It was in this place,
in the year 1910,
that a Boy made of color
a Girl made of night…


Hell Gate was a real ride at Coney Island’s Dreamland Park, where the fire of 1911 began–and destroyed the park.

Lindsay Bandy is the ARA and blogmaster for EPA SCBWI, and has two poems slated for publication in Highlights Hello. She lives in Southern Lancaster County with her husband, two daughters, and cat, so when she’s not writing or SCBWI-ing, she’s momming.

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23 Responses to #LoveMadeVisible: The Inevitable, by Lindsay Bandy + Giveaway!

  1. delightfully mysterious!

  2. I agree with Patricia, so mysterious! I’m amazed by your imagination!!!

  3. Kara Newhouse says:

    Ooh, Lindsay you’ve got me hooked! I want to read more. The atmosphere reminds me of The Night Circus, one of my favorite novels. Is this a manuscript you’re still working on or submitting or sold?

  4. Helen Kitrosser says:

    Your poem has piqued my interest in doing research on the Coney Island parks, the fire and the girl and boy who met there in 1910. The atmospheric mood you have created is spell-binding. If you are writing a story incorporating this setting and feeling, I will certainly look forward to reading it. Also, congratulations on the coming publication of your poems in HIGH FIVE Magazine.

    • Lindsay Bandy says:

      Thank you, Helen! Dreamland was an interesting place, for sure. During my research, I read the book DREAMLAND by Kevin Baker and also THE MUSEUM OF EXTRAORDINARY THINGS by Alice Hoffman. Both good reads with lots of factual stuff!

  5. Erik Ammon says:

    I love the idea of three perspectives (and one in prose!). The last line alone makes me want mooooorrrreeee!!!!

  6. Diane Hanington says:

    Quite an intriguing excerpt!

  7. Chrissa Pedersen says:

    Incredibly haunting. I admire how you’ve given each park it’s own personality with such spare language.

  8. Laura Marinakos says:

    I love this! Once your book hits the stores, it will be on my list to buy. I absolutely love books with elements of fantasy and magic woven throughout it. Good luck! You have me hooked so far! 🙂

  9. Nadine Poper says:

    Oh, Lindsay, was the the manuscript I had the chance to read at that Round Table this past September? I loved that!! And I love this one too.

    • Lindsay Bandy says:

      Yes! It’s a part of the same manuscript you read the beginning of, but this poem comes a little later in the story. It’s been so much fun to write! Hope to see you again soon 🙂

  10. Kristen C.S. says:

    Oh, I’m so glad you shared! I love this story so much and can’t wait to read it all through! =)

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  12. fspoesy says:

    I really like the imagery of the three jealous sisters. I definitely would want to read this whole story. I also want to go on the Hellgate ride. 🙂

  13. Krista Maxwell says:

    Sounds intriguing!

  14. Laura Selinsky says:

    Brings back lovely memories of the rundown, but ominous, Asbury Park amusements of my long lost childhood. Thanks!

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